My Planet Writing

Create and Describe Your Own Planet

Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make my writing
interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my writing
interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor, alliteration,
onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words to include in
my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a descriptive piece of writing
to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince people to move to your planet. You want you
writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie.
Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it successful and look at how
to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember to proof-read (check spelling and punctuation) and
edit (does it make sense? do you need to change any sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and fill in
your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

My Writing

                                                 Mint

Mint is a Earth like planet. It is as blue as its own ocean. One day it will come
into our solar system. It is 2x bigger than the moon and contains 4x more
diamond and other ores than the ao (Earth) does today. If you were to take a
photo from a spaceship in space it would look like ao (Earth) and Oris.
Mint is much more matoke (colder) than earth because it is very far away from
the sun but is still hot because of how hot the core of the planet is.

We would need a spaceship to get there but because of its rain, it is really hard
to survive there and plus it rains non stop because of its tahuaroa (ocean).
Because of the rain, the ocean will fill up and cover all the land before it enters
our solar system. It would look really beautiful if it would stop raining.

                                                    

Mint is beside our Solar System. It has lots of trees. It is floating towards our
Solar System. When it enters our solar system it will not change the orbit of the
planets because it is too small.

To change the orbit of a planet it would have to be really big like Jupiter.
Because when our Solar System was young Jupiter came in our Solar System and because its so big the gravitational pull between the Sun and
Jupiter change the orbits of the space rocks caused them to collide with each
other and made the terrestrial planets, Mercury, Venus, Mars and Earth.

Mint is a life living planet. It has animals but no humans. It has plants and
dinosaurs, and many other wild animals. It has oxygen like Earth. Because it is
bigger than the Moon and smaller than the Earth, it has very well balanced
gravity.                          

The space crafts we have today would not go that far because it would take
light years to get there.

By Cailan